Well first of all, I wish more story could be for a more maure audience because i'm more of a comical person. Also in my story i feel i missing the mexican setting. I feel that the dust, and dirt aren't there. Also i feel that appropriate dialogue is missing. I'll come about that easy though.
The main thing i feel i'm missing though is characters. I only have two. I don't have a wide variety of dialogue in my story. It's wither the student talking to the teacher or to himself. There are two occasions when he talks to his friends but those are like 15 second conversations. I'll have to contemplate on how to spice this story up with some action. Action is what i feel it needs!
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